DISCLAIMER: THIS STORY IS NOT FULLY ORIGINAL BUT IS A FAN FICTION (ALTERNATE PATH) FOR THE STORY AKARNAE BY LYNETTE NONI BUT FROM THE PERSPECTIVE OF KAIDEN

I like the build up at the end and the descriptive language you used in this story. Great job I can't wait to see what happens next!

I really like the Idea of people getting together and giving feedback to each other and the whole build a community sort of thing. I myself have been using the site since it first came out (you can check if you don't believe me) and I admit I have been wanting features like this for a while. :)

I like how you structured the beginning chapter and it is very open to write continuations to it. (I don't know why but it reminds me of the beginning of arcane lol)

I'm aiming for an ending where Kaelis has to fight the leader of the government to save the world but I'm kinda far away from that 😅 lol

(I used Japanese names)

I like the reference to something like demon slayer (swordsmen, demons, fantasy style, hard battle, that one really strong character who is nice (tanjiro))

I like the description in the 2nd paragraph and the 1st

Thank you for reading up to chapter 5

It’s quite funny that my second chapter was in the opposite direction.

Hi there

Thank you for reading

Feel free to write a new second or third chapter if you would like

This is the original second chapter of the tower made by me!

Hi

By the way my second chapter is categorised as adventure

Thank for reading my story! I would really appreciate if you liked the chapter and started reading chapter two.