Wow! I echo the comment from ririoreo, the description of the lion's anguish is really well done.

This story shows promise of leading to something intriguing.

Very interesting. Good imagery. What's next?

Definitely an intriguing fantasy. Very good!

No longer blonde. He now wears a brunette wig.

Adding to my last comment. Actually, I'd like for other writers to add chapters to my stories. Gnicolae could change his mind about following alphabetical order. He might find adventure and romance. Whatever. Or, there might be an Alternative Path -- The Mysterious Box could be the starting point for many different types of adventures.

Sure, those are possible choices. If Gnicolae ever reaches the letter Q, he might go to Quito, the capital of Ecuador.

Okay. I missed that completely. Her story is even more complicated than I had imagined.

I'm intrigued that you've written about a character who seems to live for the Dance. Nicely done! However, I think it'll be difficult to write about this 'Dancing Machine' character in the time periods you mention in your synopsis. I suggest that you use a 20th or 21st Century setting, so that you can readily include more atmosphere. Just for example, your character might fantasize about dancing "The Nutcracker" at the Lincoln Center or at the Kennedy Center when it reopens. A contemporary setting would allow your character to showcase her talent in school plays or in dance contests. She might meet a 'hot stud' male dancer. If I wrote such a story, I would include a few passages from popular songs that your readers would recognize. Anyway, I'm looking forward to reading more of your story.

I agree with Riot45's comment on the paragraph spacing.

I certainly welcome the positive comments you have made. Thank you. I'm not familiar with the app 'Discord'. I'm very cautious about using Social Media that is unknown to me. I'd be happy to share your idea. Please contact me by using the Message function here on Fictish.

These characters take a while to warm up. The man, especially, is quite shy. Please read the following chapters; you'll see the characters grow.

You'd love to see more? Okay. Coming soon.

Thanks for your comment. Ok, it's profanity, not pornography. Sometimes it's just difficult to recount a realistic conversation without using some very common, yet profane, expressions.

WOW! Thank you brandit for another captivating tale. Please, continue. What's next?

What profanity did the Censor find in this Chapter? Is it because Rabbie is described as an arrogant onager (or some such word)?

CORRECTION: The sentence that reads "We continue flying east and south." should read "We continue flying west and south."

I'm puzzled that the Censor made a "Porn" notation on this story. I can think of two possible reasons. (1) I used the expression 'WTH". I didn't spell out the meaning; it could be "What the Hashbrowns". Anyway, I don't consider this expression even to be off-color, much less pornographic. (2) One of my characters excitedly says, "You bet your sweet ..." She didn't complete the commonly used phrase with the word that means 'donkey'. Without that last word, this is certainly not pornographic.

Really interesting. I like it!

To understand the reference to the vizier who cheated death, see my earlier story, "Rendezvous at Samarkand" or the Wikipedia article on Samarkand.