This is great, I love sci-fi like this !

This is a super good start, and I love your writing style!

This is awesome, the writing is very immersive and flows great and the story is very interesting. Can't wait to see where it goes!

This is a super intriguing opening!

This is a lovely idea - I share your frustrations, and am massively excited to see Fictish grow!

OKay, I love this, it's hilarious. As a Briton myself, I definitely struggled writing the previous chapter and had to do far too much research into American coins, haha.

This is really well written, and intriguingly so, leaving threads in many directions - I hope you enjoy my chapter 2 interpretation!

A horrific twist on Animal Farm I see? I love it.

This is beatifully written

Amazing story, its suspenseful, intriguing and I adore these characters already - I absolutely want to read more! However, there's a bit of an issue with show don't tell here, which impedes the action, realism and flow of the story. For example: “No, just listen to my plan before you deny it,” Jordon said, looking at the group of Josh, Brian, Dillion, and Courtney who had gathered around him. “I’ve been studying the drones for some time now and have learned their patterns. They had the same pattern for the first few weeks, but their pattern suddenly changed, and this new pattern has been in motion ever since. If they are on a schedule of some sort, which I'm sure they are, then according to my observation, their pattern is about to change again. This is when I'll make my move and get up over that wall." You could change this between what Jordon says, and what you, as the narrator adds in: “No, just listen to my plan before you deny it,” Jordon said, looking at Josh, Brian, Dillion, and Courtney who had gathered around him. “I’ve been studying the drones for some time now," he says, running through the flight patterns in his mind. "They had the same pattern for the first few weeks, and then it changed. It's stayed that way for a while now. They're on a schedule - and about to change again," he says with certainty. "This is when I'll make my move and get up over that wall." This flows better, and adds more tension and realism to the dialogue, while keeping the information that the audience has intact. This is a great story and I can't wait to read more from you!