This was very much peaky comedy, and oh Ethan that would be so embarrassing in real life. Thanks for sharing! :)

That poor kitchen, I am really feeling for the parents right now. A wonderful start to the story, thanks for sharing! :)

This is too funny, I love the start to Emily's story, as well as, her voice and characterization. They really showcase your skills as a writer, and I hope to see more from you, thanks for sharing! :)

I loved this line "The old fashioned way to get in exercise was to chase them" it was too funny, and I love how creative you are, thanks for sharing! :)

The confusion is why I love stories, because it is always an opportunity to learn more, thanks for sharing! :)

Very interesting start to the story, and I completely understand as I use to work at a convenience store, you can't just give everyone a discount when you make minimum wage. Like that dime, those pennies, that quarter, it all adds up, and I never had it, my co-workers didn't either. That ending tho, I wonder where you were going with it? Thanks for sharing. :)

Mason sounds like a bully, I hope that he becomes a better person, especially when it shouldn't matter if his target is a girl or boy. Wonderful writing, and hope to see more of this story from you, and thanks for sharing! :)

I really loved the addition to the story, you are very creative, keep it up, and thanks for sharing!

That's too funny, it reminds me of someone I know who was named Dirt, and then there was someone I knew who nicknamed himself Loser. Thanks for sharing! :)

Very interesting, and it goes to show the about the addition of sugar and how they are like a drug. It reminds me of a documentary that I watched about how the cartel has it's food in everything including sugar, but it also reminds me of Parks & Rec with how the whole town is in love with Sweetums and not caring if it is bad for them. Thanks for sharing! :)

The wall? Now that is crazy, and funny. I hope to see more of Xavier, Miranda, and the wall. Thanks for sharing! :)

Poor Graham, I would not know what to do if I was him! Thanks for sharing! :)

Oh wow, that sounds like a crazy nightmare, I would 100% freak out if that was me, but what an interesting way to start a story, hope to see more, and thanks for sharing! :)

Oh no, a road block, I really loved the writing here, and thanks for sharing! :)

I love how she isn't listening to her friend at all, and is 100% committed on the escape lol. This is a really wonderful addition to the story, thanks for sharing!

This is too funny, and I loved this line “Maya… this is a math test, not prison.” but I am with Maya escape math all the way, I like the distinct voices between Maya and Liam, and your writing, thanks for sharing!

An animal alliance, I did not see that coming, and I really loved the addition to the story, and would love to see more, thanks for sharing! :)

I feel bad for the little girl, because maybe it need to be done, but she shouldn't have had to see it or be there for it. But lovely start to the chapter, and I hope to see more from you, and thanks for sharing! :)

I really like your addition to this story, and how you made each character have a different voice, hope to see more, and thanks for sharing! :)

I would completely freak out if that happened to me, I loved how you started this story and how well that you wrote, I hope to see more, thanks for sharing!