Exciting beginning!

Not a work of creative fiction, but damn you’re so brave to share this with the world. I feel like I can relate to a lot of this. I’m in junior year of college now, screened positive for depression, and battling (thankfully mild) executive dysfunction. I hope this platform is healing for you!

Thanks! I didn't really want to make Lea into a recurring character, but it was such a great opportunity to naturally provide some exposition on this mysterious figure by having her ask questions.

Maybe! I got Maddox from a random name generator and liked it, then I realized that the guy from the initial letter was named Max and thought there might be a connection there. This is the kind of thing I love getting "yes and'ed" on. I can easily see some kind of symbolism with the letter X in government-assigned names representing that the government is trying to cancel creative expression.

I think the site maybe limits how frequently you can post to avoid spam? Good start to the story though.

Yeah, that could be cool!

Great continuation! Love it!

Interesting! I keep reading the title as "The Peregrine Files," which would have been a great title for a paperback YA series in the early 2000s. It's cool how the different paths to this one (with the possible exception of The Beacon) could all be canon to each other.

A novel written in a poem format, with line breaks in the middle of sentences (aka enjambments) like this story has.

This is cool! It reminds me of worship music, a bit.

Great start! I appreciate how the narrator's personality and conflict is introduced before the fantasy elements are brought into the story, and the novel-in-verse style is interesting although not my cup of tea. I'll be watching this one for sure.

Thanks! This world, Trivera, is my secondary WIP, a worldbuilding project that's been going on for years now. I've posted a few other stories that are set in it, but this is the only one on the main plot.

Thank you! I'd love to see a continuation at some point!

Thank you! It was fun to write and worldbuild for this one. "Before" definitely made me think of a post-apocalyptic world, and the ending scene was what came to me first. I worked backwards from there to figure out who the characters were and how they got the relic, and at that point I realized this was going to be a little longer than the usual flash fiction.

Is the profanity tag on this story wrong? I didn't see any obvious curse words.

The short lines are a little tedious to read, but I really like the way this story is told! It has some serious potential!

I like it!

What in the FNAF is this?!? (but in a good way)

I really hope the bit about Dane's eyes changing color every time they're described is intentional, because it's really funny.

Sure! I love seeing story continuations!